I 've read your post and I love that you started with James and Sarah's wedding day. I think you have some room to create a little more of a scene. What you have at the moment is a summary narrative. But it would be nice to alternate your narrative with scene. For example, the wedding bells are ringing. The bride and groom arrive, how do they arrive, what are they wearing, what does the church look like. Create the scene for us, paint a picture, put us in the action. You say you want to write an engaging story so I think scene needs to be a part of it. At the moment you have wonderful summary narrative, but in some upcoming newsletters we will talk a lot about creative nonfiction and the use of narrative and scene or showing and telling to create a really engaging story. Hope this helps. You're off to a great start.